David Rothman and Biiwide have joined forces to convince me that Google Documents is the best way to share work-in-progress. So: Here is the opening chunk of the Troll Story.
Please hew away at it: I need all the feedback I can get. And I can take it. I think.
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Read the opening of your troll tale. Very nice. I was a bit confused about the nature of the boat/truck at the very beginning. I was struggling to understand the nature of these vehicles and how they looked. Also, their names are so similar that it is easy to get confused over which one is which. But I’m a bit sleep deprived. It’s very enjoyable reading your blog. Take care and happy writing.
Yes, that’s consistent with the other feedback I’ve gotten. I’ll get it cleaned up for comprehensibility.
I’ll also be careful to run all work-in-progress through a “is this gibberish?” edit at the very least, before posting.